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>>132837
>willing to be rawer
I think >>129173 sums it up best tbh. All of the shit said in Death and ReBorn is so forgettable because it feels fake. This hospital scene is meant to be emotional in both, but writerfail’s works so much better because it treats it the way it is, doesn’t hold back, all while characterizing Coco by showing her idealization of a Maya that either 
A. Never existed
Or
B. Hasn’t existed in a long time
And that’s what makes it so engaging.
Death and ReBorn on the other hand suffers from the fact that everyone sounds the fucking same, and everything is delivered in the most bland and boring way possible.
Even though writerfail isn’t exactly consistent, scenes like this show that he has oodles of potential and just needs more time to learn the fundamentals and develop consistency. I’m confident that the end of his story will be far better than the beginning